I like where you're headed. I prefer the image of the photoshopped version much more so than the original. That branch is begging to go. though a bit bunched up, the branches you've selected show a good general understanding of shohin theory with a first, second, back branch and then an apex. Please do not be in a hurry to get this into a bonsai pot. Tuthfully, it'll take another 10 years to thicken up enough to be convincing (imo and it stinks) but I did the same thing when I first started the habit.

Keep it alive now. Move on to another trainer (think big) and keep this thing happy. What kind of after care have you decided on after researching this particular species? I see other trees in the background... share?

I was talking to a buddy last night about our learning curve. What we have both learned from our mentors is that we should be working on trees to learn techniques and accept that they may die bc it will take just as long if not longer to learn proper horticultural care for these potted up plants. The doing keeps us entertained, the dying keeps us striving for education. Someone who has more experience will be able to get a tree into workable condition before a novice can.