This is definitely a start. I think you still have a ways to go though: 1) the beginning could use some incidentals to keep it interesting. The average user doesn't get the same rush you the music maker gets when a snare or hat is added after 8 bars or whatever. When I started out in electronic music, I would have three minutes of build thinking it was the most amazing thing but really, it was crap :) It takes some serious skill to get the build and intro's "Just right". 2)The track could use some cohesion and IMHO the transitions don't effectively feel like transitions, more like stops and starts to different tracks. A common synth or phrase to unify all would help. 3)I think your synths and sounds could use some heavier customisation...it sounds a tad canned. 4)Keep up the good work, there's a lot you can do with this!